六級高分作文_生命不止，奮斗不息

　生命不止，奮斗不息

Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay on personal strivings by commenting on the quote, “Cease to struggle and you cease to live .” You can cite examples to illustrate your point. You should write at least 150 words but no more than 200 words.

審題立意

1. 導(dǎo)語解讀：要求考生從評論“生命不止，奮斗不息”入手，就“個人奮斗”這一話題展開論述。

2. 文章立意：個人奮斗是人們成功的重要方面。它意味著不向困難和挫折屈服。個人奮斗的過程也應(yīng)包括借助外力使自己少走彎路。因此，個人奮斗是最重要的，在奮斗的過程中應(yīng)充分利用現(xiàn)有資源。

寫作思路

1. 第一段簡要解釋引語的含義，然后提出論點(diǎn)：個人奮斗對于成功來說至關(guān)重要。

2. 第二段通過名人、偉人成功的經(jīng)驗(yàn)，用例證的方式論述個人奮斗的重要性。

3. 第三段論述個人奮斗并不意味著否定其他可利用的資源，二者如有機(jī)結(jié)合更有助于個人的成功。

參考范文

There is a quote that says, “Cease to struggle and you cease to live.” It means that one should never stop pursuing his goals no matter how great the difficulties he encounters are. 1 It stresses the importance of personal strivings. If one stops before setbacks, he will achieve nothing. So personal strivings are of vital importance to success. 2

Personal strivings refer to ongoing efforts made by people to achieve their goals. There have been many great figures in history, many of whom were very poor in childhood without relatives or friends to help them out. However, they relied on themselves and never bowed to any difficulty. With their personal strivings, they paved their way to success. 3 Just as the famous saying goes, “God helps those who help themselves.” 4

I don’t mean to deny the importance of resources such as money, family support, and social connections that one can leverage. 5 As family has a great influence on personal development, those who can make full use of good family resources will enjoy a better chance to succeed. However, taking advantages of family resources should be based on personal strivings. If one does not work hard himself, he would not achieve any success, no matter how better-off his family may be. 6

有句名言說：“生命不止，奮斗不息?！边@句話意味著，一個人應(yīng)該永不放棄追求，不管他會遇到多大的困難。它強(qiáng)調(diào)了個人奮斗的重要性。如果一個人在挫折面前停下了腳步，那么他將一事無成。所以個人奮斗對于成功而言至關(guān)重要。

個人奮斗是指人們?yōu)榱藢?shí)現(xiàn)目標(biāo)而不斷付出努力。歷史上有很多偉人，他們中許多人在童年時期都很貧困，沒有親戚或朋友可以向他們伸出援手。然而，他們依靠自己，從不向任何困難低頭。通過個人奮斗，他們走出了自己的成功之路。就像名言所說：“自助者天助之”。

我不是說要去否認(rèn)諸如金錢、家庭支持、社交關(guān)系之類可以加以利用的資源。由于家庭對個人發(fā)展也有重要作用，那些能夠充分利用家庭資源的人會享有更好的成功機(jī)會。然而，利用家庭資源要以個人奮斗為前提。自己不努力，家庭條件再優(yōu)越，也無法獲得任何成功。

范文點(diǎn)評

1. 開篇引入引言并加以簡要評述。

2. 首段末句明確表達(dá)自己的觀點(diǎn)：個人奮斗對于成功而言至關(guān)重要。

3. 以偉人憑借個人奮斗取得成功為例，論證個人奮斗的重要性。

4. 引用名言進(jìn)一步強(qiáng)調(diào)個人奮斗的重要性。

5. 補(bǔ)充說明其他因素對于個人成功的作用，使文章觀點(diǎn)更為全面。

6. 指出其他因素要以個人奮斗為前提，若個人不努力，家庭條件再優(yōu)越，也無法取得成功。

要點(diǎn)用法

cease v. 停止

be of vital importance to 對……至關(guān)重要

ongoing adj. 持續(xù)的

relative n. 親戚

leverage v. 利用

句法點(diǎn)評

1. There have been many great figures in history, many of whom were very poor in childhood without relatives or friends to help them out.

句中many of whom其實(shí)是“介詞+關(guān)系代詞”的結(jié)構(gòu)，whom引導(dǎo)定語從句，whom指的是great figures。

2. I don’t mean to deny the importance of resources such as money, family support, and social connections that one can leverage.

句中mean to do sth.意為“有意做某事”，that引導(dǎo)定語從句。