例如:(1)We can imagine the beautiful surroundings.(2)There are many trees along the streets.(3)There is a clean river in the city.(4) There are many fishes in the river.(5)There are willow trees on the one side.(6)There are some pieces of grassland on the other side.(7)There are many flowers on them.
文中七個句子都是簡單句,句型結(jié)構(gòu)單一,而且句子長短同一,都在七、八詞左右,十分單調(diào)。
修改后的段落:(1)Just imagine the beautiful surroundings if we make our cities greener.(2)Green trees line the streets.(3)A clean river winds through the city,in which a lot of fishes abound.(4)On the one side stand rows of willow trees.(5)On the other side lies a stretch of grassland sprinkled with many yellow and red flowers.
改寫后的這段文字,有長句(1)、(3)、(5),也有短句(2)和(4),一長一短,抑揚(yáng)頓挫的節(jié)奏感就出來了。不僅句子長短交插,而且句型結(jié)構(gòu)變化也很大,使文章流暢自然,生動活潑。