例句： You are enthusiastic and enterprising. And you are one of the most talented and diligentin our department. You have already won 2 awards for good academic results. 改句： You, enthusiastic and enterprising,are one of the most talented and diligent in our department,already winning 2 awards for outstanding academic results. 解析：我們可以看到例句中有3個簡單句，咋看上去給人一種啰嗦、累贅的感覺。但細看之下，不難發(fā)現(xiàn)3個句子的主語全部是you，因此我們就該聯(lián)想到同位語、插入語的應用。從改句中，我們可以發(fā)現(xiàn)謂語從原來的3個變成了1個，頓時使句子顯得高級，精簡很多。其次，還有一個改動之處為"good"，這個詞是常用詞，口語中用的更頻繁些，我們可以想一些同義詞例如"excellent"，"outstanding"等等。 下面請大家試試看吧！ 答案： Depending on his families's support, he found a decent a job, which was despised by one of his friends.
1.He depended on his families's support to find a good job. One of his friends looked downed on him.
