高中英語(yǔ)作文|旅行前的準(zhǔn)備

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Prepare my Grandparents' Journey to Shanghai
Firstly, we surfed the Internet together to book a hotel and got some information about train tickets. And we were overjoyed to learn that, luckily, the weather in Shanghai will be nice in the following days. The next morning, I went to the train station and waited for a long time before I bought two tickets. After I reached[1] home, I helped my grandparents to prepare their luggages[2],ensuring everything had been packed well. Yesterday afternoon, accompanied by me, my grandparents arrived at the train station safetly[3]. When the train began to move, I waved to them and gave them my best wishes.
Wish them to have a great journey!

修改意見(jiàn)：
[1] reach 表示到達(dá)是及物動(dòng)詞，而這里的home前面沒(méi)有任何限定詞，則被視為副詞。所以這里改為：arrived home; 或者：got back home.
[2] luggage 是個(gè)不可數(shù)名詞，不要加復(fù)數(shù)。
[3] safetly拼寫(xiě)錯(cuò)誤；改為：safely

點(diǎn)評(píng)：22分，是一篇高檔次文章，文章整體流暢，用詞得體（聽(tīng)了俺的話就是不一樣哈）。但稍微偏瘦了一點(diǎn)點(diǎn)，如果能在中間敘述部分稍微增添一丁點(diǎn)筆墨，就能使文章內(nèi)容更充實(shí)，更雄渾有厚度。當(dāng)然，這就是向滿(mǎn)分文章進(jìn)軍了。
比如：when the train began to move 改成：When the train pulled out from the station, roaring away, I waved to them and gave them my best wishes.

最后一段的：Wish them to have a great journey! 改成：They reached out their heads, fixing their eyes on me, their faces beaming with satisfaction. 這僅僅是一種方向，一種熏陶，不要過(guò)多可以追求。