托福寫作用句太平庸得不到高分？提升表達(dá)水平要學(xué)會改寫

　　托福寫作中考生需要關(guān)注語法問題，很多同學(xué)寫出來的句子雖然能夠讀得懂，但其實(shí)在native speaker看來都是相當(dāng)別扭的，一看就是chinglish的感覺。而想要寫出地道的句子，大家就需要在語法方面多下功夫。下面小編就為大家提供一些托福寫作語法選擇恰當(dāng)表達(dá)方式的改寫實(shí)例。

　　托福寫作語法表達(dá)改寫實(shí)例分析

　　選擇合適的語法結(jié)構(gòu)可以使句子意思的表達(dá)更為精確和簡練。雖然語法的多樣性也很重要，但選擇最恰當(dāng)?shù)恼Z法結(jié)構(gòu)仍然是更為重要的考慮因素。以下，推薦幾種考生們在考慮選擇何種語法結(jié)構(gòu)時可以參考的原則：

　　1.一個句子的主語和謂語動詞應(yīng)該能夠反映句子中的最重要的意思。例如：

　　The situation that resulted in my grandfather’s not being able to study engineering was that his father needed help on the farm.

　　從意思上來分析，上面這句話需要表達(dá)的重要的概念是“grandfather’s not being able to　study”，而在表達(dá)這個概念時，原句用的主語是situation，謂語動詞是was，不能強(qiáng)調(diào)需要表達(dá)的重點(diǎn)概念，可以改為下面這句話：

　　My grandfather couldn’t study engineering because his father needed help on　the farm.

　　2.避免頻繁使用“there be”結(jié)構(gòu)，例如下面的句子：

　　There were 25 cows on the farm that my grandfather had to milk every day.It was hard work for my grandfather.

　　可以改為：My grandfather worked hard. He had to milk 25 cows on the farm every day.

　　更簡潔的句式為：

　　My grandfather worked hard milking 25 cows daily.

　　3.把從句改為短語或單詞。例如：

　　Dairy cows were raised on the farm， which was located 100 kilometers from the nearest university and was in an area that was remote.

　　簡介的表達(dá)方式為：

　　The dairy farm was located in a remote area， 100 kilometers to the nearest university.

　　4.僅在需要強(qiáng)調(diào)賓語而不是主語的時候，才使用被動語態(tài)。例如：

　　In the fall， not only did the cows have to be milked， but also the hay was mowed and stacked by my grandfather’s family.

　　本句不夠簡潔的原因是本句的重心應(yīng)該是“忙碌的家庭-my grandfather’s

　　family”，而使用了被動語態(tài)后，仿佛重心變成了cows和hay。下面的表達(dá)方式是主動語態(tài)，相對來說更簡潔一些：

　　In the fall， my grandfather’s family not only milked the cow but also mowed　and stacked the hay.

　　5.用更為精確的一個動詞來代替動詞短語，例如下面這句話：

　　My grandfather didn’t have time to stand around doing nothing with his　school friends.

　　Stand around doing nothing其實(shí)可以用一個動詞來表達(dá)，即loiter：My grandfather didn’t have time to loiter with his school friends.

　　6.有時兩句話的信息經(jīng)過組合完全可以用一句話來簡練地表達(dá)，例如：

　　Profits from the farm were not large. Sometimes they were too small to meet　the expenses of running a farm. They were not sufficient to pay for a university　degree.

　　兩句話的信息可以合并為下面這句更為簡潔的句子：

　　Profits from the farm were sometimes too small to meet operational expenses，let alone pay for a university degree.

　　上述這些托福寫作中語法改寫的實(shí)際案例，不知道大家有沒有看懂呢?學(xué)會更恰當(dāng)?shù)谋磉_(dá)方式，你的作文得分就能有所提升了。