2015年12月英語六級作文真題第一套點評:誤導信息

　　It is true that the internet has brought us great convenience and efficiency, however, as the data grows at an exponential rate, the severity of misleading information arises.

　　Deceptive news or tips travel fast online, and worse still, they may shadow our routine life or even hinder the progress of our society. Lack of enough consideration, we are easily misled by false information which always appears in bulk on the webpage. Some will alter their plans to deal with the so-called disaster but only affect their normal life; a few may even go further to violate social security and economic trend. Moreover, if the misleading news isn’t corrected soon, there may be a trust crisis between individuals and the government. For example, the nuclear leakage in Japan in 2011 has caused great panic in Eastern China, where thousands of people went out to rob salt after the rumor that salt can prevent radiation, and ended in a turbulence in the domestic market.

　　To prevent misleading information spreading, government should set up laws to regulate online news while individuals need to judge independently. Only when they work hand in hand will the harm of false information be diminished to the end.

　　點評：

　　題干中明確標出同學們需要focus on the harm caused by misleading information online，所以同學們這篇文章重點就應該放在harm危害這個詞上面。

　　范文中，開篇以社會現(xiàn)象引入到主題詞misleading information誤導信息的出現(xiàn);之后第二段開始重點討論誤導信息的嚴重危害。內容層層遞進，從謠言使一些人做出沖動行為，推進到若不治理將會產生對于政府信任危機。并且段落最后用日本核輻射導致國內搶鹽事件的舉例進一步證明了謠言的危害。中間段緊扣主題。

　　文章結尾部分采用建議式的結尾方式，提出了針對之前提出的危害的解決措施，從政府到個人都有對應的建議。這也更加緊扣之前第二段所提到的內容。最后一句運用押韻的手法(hand in hand對應to the end)將文章帶入收尾。最后一段的目的在于使得文章從單純的列舉誤導信息的危害加入了作者自己對這一現(xiàn)象的思考，也讓文章的內容更加完整。