On Excessive Packaging
Nowadays the phenomena of excessive packaging of goods are prevailing in our society: clothes swathed in tissue paper, placed in cardboard box and finally wrapped in well-designed plastic bags, imported bottles of grape wine packed in wooden boxes, fruits put in hand-woven baskets, to name but a few.
There are several causes of excessive packaging. The first reason is that a large number of companies believe that they can attract customers’ attention and stimulate their purchasing desire by over-packaging their goods, thus gaining more profits. On the other hand, quite a number of consumers mistakenly hold that the more delicate the package is, the better the quality will be, thus encouraging excessive packaging.
In my point of view, excessive packaging has disastrous consequences, including the loss of precious resources, excessive consumption of water and energy, and unnecessary extraction of scarce land for landfill.
To solve the problem, it’s necessary to take the following measures. First, laws and regulations must be made to restrict excessive packaging of companies. In addition, we need to raise consumer’s awareness that excessive packaging doesn’t equal to high quality and advocate packaging recycling.
【解析】
本次作文的話題是“過度包裝”，話題不斷新，考生應(yīng)該都比較熟悉。寫好本篇作文的關(guān)鍵在于緊跟題目所列提綱：現(xiàn)象——原因——看法和建議，確定相應(yīng)的寫作結(jié)構(gòu)。重點分析產(chǎn)生此現(xiàn)象的原因有哪些，把最重要的兩三點羅列下來。最后，根據(jù)分析出的原因提供相應(yīng)的建議。
范文首段開門見山，首先一句話總結(jié)如今社會上過度包裝現(xiàn)象盛行，而后舉出一些實例補充說明。
第二段重點從公司和消費者兩方面論述產(chǎn)生過度包裝的原因。公司方面是為了吸引顧客，刺激消費，贏取更多的利潤;消費者方面是認為包裝越精美，質(zhì)量越好這種錯誤的消費意識。
接下來作者表明自己的看法，認為過度包裝會導(dǎo)致很多問題：稀缺資源的流失;水，能源的過度消耗以及產(chǎn)生不必要的垃圾場等。
最后一段作者針對原因提出了一些解決方案。第一方面，建立法律規(guī)章制度來約束企業(yè)的過度包裝行為。第二方面，必須讓消費者認識到過度包裝不等同于高質(zhì)量，并提倡包裝物的回收利用。
本文條理清晰，論述充分，語言使用規(guī)范得當(dāng)，如：to name but a few，the first reason is that…，on the other hand，in my point of view，to solve the problem，first，in addition等。
