GRE寫作詞句優(yōu)化技巧實(shí)例分享 這樣改寫文章更地道不再有chinglish味

　　對很多中國GRE考生來說，考試中的寫作部分實(shí)際上更對的是一個翻譯過程，如何把思想中的中文轉(zhuǎn)化成現(xiàn)實(shí)中的英文是考生在GRE寫作中最關(guān)心的問題，也是學(xué)生們首要應(yīng)該解決的問題。但是很多考生受思維定式的影響，在英文寫作中套用中文思維，往往寫出一些表達(dá)和意思都讓老外考官覺得別扭的中式英文，從而丟失了不少分?jǐn)?shù)。如何在GRE寫作中避免中式思維，下面小編就通過實(shí)例為大家做一些講解。

　　1、Original: If we agree to say that school offers us the best book knowledge acquisition then our society offers us the best surviving techniques in a hard way.

　　Revised: If we agree that school offers the best method for the acquisition of book knowledge, then our society offers us the best method for acquiring common sense or “street smarts”.

　　Agree to say that表達(dá)中式化，只需要agree that即可;the best book knowledge acquisition改為the best method for the acquisition of book knowledge(學(xué)校給我們提供了獲取書本知識的最好方法)更為恰當(dāng) ，同樣后面的the best surviving techniques改為the best method for acquiring common sense,加上street marks(街頭智慧)給文章的GRE詞匯增添色彩。

　　2、Original: They can spend more time studying education and communication to improve their role as a mother, wife and daughter.

　　Revised: They can also decide to spend more time studying, education themselves, in order to improve themselves in their roles as mothers, wives and daughters.

　　原句中studying education and communication的說法中式化，不符合英語的表述，應(yīng)該為studying，educating themselves。除了詞語表達(dá)，此句中還存在其他問題，如名詞單復(fù)數(shù)的使用：不是提高他們的角色，而是提高他們自身以扮演好母親角色。

　　還有，女性不止一個人。很多人都在扮演母親角色，role和mother應(yīng)用復(fù)數(shù)，故將improve their role as a mother改為improve themselves in their roles as mother;同樣，為保持一致，wife和daughter也可用復(fù)數(shù)，原文中wife的復(fù)數(shù)寫法有誤，應(yīng)該是wives。

　　3、Original：If you can get the point of communication by watching TV，will you...?

　　Revised：If one can learn about communicating from television，will you...?

　　原句的get the point of communication by watching TV表達(dá)不清，讓人難以理解，應(yīng)該是指“從電視上學(xué)習(xí)交際”：learn about communicating from television.

　　以上幾種常見的中式英文的寫作現(xiàn)象，希望各位考生都能夠有所了解，并結(jié)合平時的練習(xí)準(zhǔn)備學(xué)會避免這種思維方式和表達(dá)上的中式英文，寫出真正地道的GRE作文，拿到作文高分。