六級高分作文_冰桶挑戰(zhàn)

　冰桶挑戰(zhàn)

Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay entitled The Ice Bucket Challenge . You should write at least 150 words but no more than 200 words according to the following guidelines:

Some believe that the ice bucket challenge is a meaningful charity activity and full of fun as well while others think it is more entertaining than charitable.

What is your opinion about the fashionable charity activity? What are the advantages and disadvantages about the ice bucket challenge?

審題立意

1. 導(dǎo)語解讀：要求考生以“冰桶挑戰(zhàn)”為話題，依據(jù)提綱進(jìn)行寫作，并發(fā)表自己對這一活動的看法。

2. 文章立意：冰桶挑戰(zhàn)慈善活動兼具公益性和趣味性，但如果變得過于娛樂化，就會變味。

寫作思路

1. 第一段描述冰桶挑戰(zhàn)現(xiàn)象，由此引出對這一問題的評論。

2. 第二段為主體段落，通過對比論證的方式闡述人們對于冰桶挑戰(zhàn)活動兩種不同的觀點(diǎn)。

3. 第三段提出自己對這一活動的看法。

參考范文

The Ice Bucket Challenge

ALS Ice Bucket Challenge has once stimulated considerable fervor among celebrities at home and abroad. 1 What they have done makes it possible for the public to know more about ALS and people who suffer from it. 2 However, there is no consensus among people about the ice bucket challenge. 3

Some believe that the ice bucket challenge is a meaningful charity activity and full of fun as well. The celebrities participate in the challenge to expand its influence, bringing appreciable donations and attracting more people to pay attention to the people who suffer from ALS. 4 Others think it is more entertaining than charitable because the activity has been reduced to a low-cost celebrity show, which wastes too much water and has nothing to do with charity. 4

In my point of view 5 , I firmly advocate this charity activity. Not only does it offer a chance for the sick to be known, it also reminds us to pay attention to those who are in need. The humanitarian spirit and kindness will benefit us throughout our life. I believe if the ice bucket challenge could be more environment-friendly, the voice of disapproval will die down.

冰桶挑戰(zhàn)

ALS冰桶挑戰(zhàn)一度點(diǎn)燃了國內(nèi)外眾多名人的巨大熱情。公眾則通過他們的付出，對ALS這種疾病及那些飽受它折磨的患者有了更多的了解。然而，人們對于冰桶挑戰(zhàn)的看法并不一致。

一部分人認(rèn)為，“冰桶挑戰(zhàn)”慈善活動既具有公益性，又帶有趣味性，是一種很有意義的活動。名人的加入擴(kuò)展了活動的影響，帶來可觀的捐款，也吸引了更多人來關(guān)注那些ALS患者。但另一些人則認(rèn)為，“冰桶挑戰(zhàn)”慈善活動過于娛樂化，因為它浪費(fèi)太多水資源，已與慈善無關(guān)，淪為了廉價的名人作秀。

就我而言，我堅決支持這項慈善活動。它不僅為患病者提供了一個被了解的機(jī)會，也提醒我們關(guān)心一下那些需要幫助的人。人道主義精神和善意會使我們終生受益。我覺得如果“冰桶挑戰(zhàn)”可以更環(huán)保些，那么反對之聲也會逐漸消失。

范文點(diǎn)評

1. 開篇介紹冰桶挑戰(zhàn)這一活動。

2. 指出活動宗旨是善意的。

3. 自然過渡，指出人們對該活動持有不同的看法。

4. 采用前后對比論證的方式闡述人們兩種對立的看法。

5. 末段提出自己的觀點(diǎn)。

要點(diǎn)用法

fervor n. 熱情

participate v. 參與

appreciable adj. （數(shù)量或效果）可觀的

donation n. 捐贈物；捐款；捐贈；捐助

be reduced to 淪為

humanitarian adj. 人道主義的

die down 逐漸消逝

句法點(diǎn)評

1. What they have done makes it possible for the public to know more about ALS and people who suffer from it.

這里運(yùn)用了主語從句What they have done，還用到了it作形式賓語的結(jié)構(gòu)：主語+謂語+ it +形容詞+ for sb. + to do sth.，此結(jié)構(gòu)中真正的賓語是不定式，it作形式賓語。

2. The celebrities participate in the challenge to expand its influence, bringing appreciable donations and attracting more people to pay attention to the people who suffer from ALS.