六級(jí)高分作文_不盲從，開辟新道路

　不盲從，開辟新道路

Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay based on the picture below. You should start your essay with a brief description of the picture and then make comments on it . You should write at least 150 words but no more than 200 words.

審題立意

1. 導(dǎo)語解讀：要求考生簡(jiǎn)要描述并評(píng)論圖畫內(nèi)容。

2. 漫畫解讀：圖片上清晰可見擁擠的人群正在搭乘電梯上樓，人群緩慢前行；而在他們的左邊一名男子步行走樓梯，暢通無阻。

3. 文章立意：多數(shù)人選擇搭乘電梯是因?yàn)樗麄冏鍪虑榱?xí)慣性選擇最省勁兒的方法，加之從眾心理的驅(qū)使，他們的腳步受到了阻礙。然而，對(duì)于選擇爬樓梯的人，雖然要付出更多的努力，但是卻節(jié)省了時(shí)間，加快了腳步。因此，只有不盲從，開辟新的道路，才能為成功創(chuàng)造更多的可能。

寫作思路

1. 第一段簡(jiǎn)要描述漫畫內(nèi)容，然后提出論點(diǎn)：絕不盲從，要開辟新道路。

2. 第二段通過對(duì)比論證闡述開辟新道路優(yōu)于盲目從眾：多數(shù)人選擇搭乘電梯是出于兩點(diǎn)原因：一是省力，二是習(xí)慣性從眾。這樣做反倒阻礙了自己前進(jìn)的腳步。然而，對(duì)于爬樓梯的人來說，雖然費(fèi)點(diǎn)勁，但由于無人與其爭(zhēng)搶，反倒加快了腳步，節(jié)省了時(shí)間。較之開辟新道路，盲目從眾更不易使自己脫穎而出，反倒錯(cuò)失成功的機(jī)會(huì)。

3. 第三段呼應(yīng)文章論點(diǎn)，再次強(qiáng)調(diào)盲從不是明智之舉，開辟新道路更易使自己脫穎而出，增加成功的機(jī)會(huì)。

參考范文

As is shown in the picture, facing two ways of going upstairs, a throng chooses to take the escalator while a man carrying his heavy baggage chooses to climb the steps. 1 If I were in the same situation, I would like to be the latter because climbing the steps seems faster than taking the escalator. 2 Obviously, the same can be said of the attitude people should take towards life. 2 Trying a new way turns out to be more efficient than just following others blindly. 3

Generally speaking, there are two reasons leading to the majority of people to take the escalator. One 4 is that people are inclined to do everything in the principle of least effort. The other 4 is that people have long been dominated by herd mentality in their minds. As a matter of fact, both “l(fā)east effort” and “herd mentality” unavoidably hinder movement. On the contrary 5 , climbing the steps enables people to quicken the pace and saves more time despite taking strenuous efforts.

To sum up, following others blindly is not always the wise choice. Trying a new way makes it possible to distinguish one from others, which proves to be a super opportunity for getting closer to success. 6

如圖所示，面對(duì)上樓的兩種方式，一群人選擇了搭乘電梯，而一位攜帶重行李的男士選擇了爬樓梯。如果我處于同樣的情境之下，我愿意做后者，因?yàn)榕罉翘菘雌饋肀瘸穗娞莞旖?。顯然，人們對(duì)待生活的態(tài)度也是同樣的道理：開辟新的道路結(jié)果會(huì)比盲從更有效。

一般說來，多數(shù)人選擇搭乘電梯有兩種原因。其一是因?yàn)槿藗冏鋈魏问虑槎純A向于本著“最省力原則”。其二是因?yàn)殚L(zhǎng)期以來人們受到“從眾心理”的驅(qū)使。事實(shí)上，“最省力原則”和“從眾心理”都不可避免地阻礙行動(dòng)。相反，爬樓梯雖然要付出艱辛的努力，卻能使腳步加快，也更節(jié)省時(shí)間。

總之，盲從不總是明智之舉。開辟新的道路有可能使人脫穎而出，它被證明是一個(gè)能夠讓人們更加靠近成功的絕佳機(jī)遇。

范文點(diǎn)評(píng)

1. 開篇簡(jiǎn)要描述圖片的內(nèi)容。

2. 自然過渡，引出在做選擇時(shí)應(yīng)持有的態(tài)度，緊扣作文話題。

3. 首段末句明確表達(dá)自己的觀點(diǎn)：開辟新的道路結(jié)果會(huì)比盲從更有效。

4. 分層次闡釋了人們搭乘電梯的原因，分析到位。

5. 采用對(duì)比論證的方式說明爬樓梯比搭乘電梯有優(yōu)勢(shì)，論證恰如其分，同時(shí)也體現(xiàn)了論證方法的多樣性。

6. 末段總結(jié)全文，重申觀點(diǎn)，并強(qiáng)調(diào)不盲從、開辟新道路的必要性。

要點(diǎn)用法

throng n. 人群

escalator n. 扶梯

turn out to be 結(jié)果證明是

majority n. 多數(shù)

be inclined to 傾向于

in the principle of... 本著……的原則

least effort 最省力

dominate v. 支配

herd mentality 從眾心理

unavoidably adv. 不可避免地

on the contrary 相反地

strenuous adj. 艱苦的

distinguish…from… 脫穎而出

prove to be 證明是

句法點(diǎn)評(píng)

1. Obviously, the same can be said of the attitude people should take towards life.

本句使用了the same can be said of...這一結(jié)構(gòu)，意為“對(duì)于……也是同樣的道理”，指同樣的道理適用于另外一種情況。

2. Trying a new way makes it possible to distinguish one from others, which proves to be a super opportunity for getting closer to success.

此句包含兩個(gè)常用句式：①make it possible to，意思是“使……成為可能”。其中it是形式賓語，真正的賓語是to后面的distinguish one from others。由于真正的賓語太長(zhǎng)所以被后置，前面由形式賓語代替。②prove to be，意為“證明是，原來是，結(jié)果是”。此處，prove用作系動(dòng)詞，后可接形容詞或名詞，該結(jié)構(gòu)中的to be可以省略。