六級高分作文_全球變暖
全球變暖
Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay based on the picture below. You should describe the picture, explain its intended meaning and then illustrate why we should pay more attention to global warming . You should write at least 150 words but no more than 200 words.
審題立意
1. 導語解讀：要求考生根據漫畫內容就“全球變暖”這一話題進行描述，并說明我們要重視全球變暖的原因。
2. 漫畫解讀：圖片上畫了兩只在聊天的動物。由下面注解文字可知，它們說的是全球變暖的現(xiàn)象。鴨子說聞到對面的豬的味道像熏肉，夸張而又形象地表達出全球變暖的程度。
3. 文章立意：全球變暖帶來了許多危害，諸如海平面上升、自然災害等，因此需要人類對此給予足夠的重視，行動起來，保護地球。
寫作思路
1. 第一段簡要描述漫畫及注解文字，點明寓意。
2. 第二段從四個方面闡述全球變暖帶來的危害。
3. 第三段呼吁人類對全球變暖給予足夠的重視，并倡導人們行動起來，保護地球。
參考范文
As is depicted in the picture, weather is becoming so hot that the duck even feels that the pig smells like bacon. A little exaggerated though it sounds, it is an indisputable fact that global warming is becoming increasingly severe. 1
Global warming has negative effects on many aspects. 2 Firstly 3 , global warming may cause the icebergs to melt, which may lead to a rise in sea level. As a result, some island nations will be submerged by the sea. Secondly 3 , due to global warming, natural disasters occur frequently, such as floods, hurricanes and so on. Thirdly 3 , the ecological balance will be destroyed and many creatures will disappear for ever with the aggravation of global warming. Fourthly 3 , the cost to compensate for the loss caused by global warming will be huge.
In conclusion, global warming is a serious problem. We should pay more attention to it. Let’s take actions, start from ourselves, advocate the low-carbon way of life, and contribute our efforts to the protection of the planet. 4
正如圖中所描述的，氣候變得如此之熱，以至于圖中的鴨子甚至感到，它對面的豬已經散發(fā)出熏肉的味道。 雖然聽起來有些夸張，但是全球變暖日益嚴重是不爭的事實。
全球變暖帶來的危害是多方面的。首先，全球變暖可能會導致冰山融化，海平面上升，結果，一些島國將被海水淹沒。第二，由于全球氣候變暖，洪水、颶風等自然災害頻發(fā)。第三，生態(tài)平衡將遭到破壞，許多生物會隨著全球變暖加劇而永遠消失。第四，為彌補因全球變暖帶來的損失，我們將付出沉重的代價。
總之，全球變暖是很嚴重的問題，我們應該更加重視這個問題。讓我們行動起來，從自身做起，倡導低碳生活方式，為保護地球貢獻自己的力量。
范文點評
1. 首段末句點明這幅漫畫的寓意：全球變暖日益嚴重。
2. 自然過渡，開始討論全球變暖帶來的危害。
3. 圍繞主題，分四個層次展開論述，有力支撐了全球變暖危害嚴重的觀點。
4. 末段呼吁人們對全球變暖給予足夠的重視，并倡導人們行動起來，保護地球。
要點用法
exaggerated adj. 夸張的
submerge v. 淹沒
natural disaster 自然災害
hurricane n. 颶風
ecological balance 生態(tài)平衡
aggravation n. 惡化
compensate for 補償；賠償
advocate v. 提倡
low-carbon adj. 低碳的
句法點評
1. A little exaggerated though it sounds, it is an indisputable fact that global warming is becoming increasingly severe.
全句是包含though引導的讓步狀語從句的復合句。though引導的讓步狀語從句使用了倒裝語序，改成正常語序應該是Though it sounds a little exaggerated。后半句為該復合句的主句，主句句首的it為形式主語，真正的主語是后面that引導的從句。
2. Let’s take actions, start from ourselves, advocate the low-carbon way of life, and contribute our efforts to the protection of the planet.
使用祈使句感召力更強，take，start，advocate和contribute四個動詞排比使用，更有氣勢。
