六級寫作經(jīng)典范文及點評：睡姿與性格
Everyone has got two personalities — the one that is shown to the world and the other that is secret and real.You don’t show your secret personality when you’re awake because you can control your behavior, but when you’re asleep, your sleeping position shows the real you. In a normal night, of course, people frequently change their position. The important position is the one that you go to sleep in.
If you go to sleep on your back, you’re a very open person. You normally trust people and you are easily influenced by fashion or new ideas. You don’t like to upset people, so you never express your real feelings. You’re quite shy and you aren’t very confident.
If you sleep on your stomach, you are a rather secretive person. You worry a lot and you’re always easily upset. You’re very stubborn, but you aren’t very ambitious. You usually live for today but not tomorrow. This means that you enjoy having a good time.
If you sleep curled up, you are probably a very nervous person. You have a low opinion of yourself and so You’re often defensive. You’re shy and you don’t normally like meeting people. You prefer to be on your own. You’re easily hurt.
If you sleep on your side, you have usually got a well-balanced personality. You know your strengths and weaknesses. You’re usually careful. You have a confident personality. You sometimes feel anxious, but you don’t often get depressed. You always say what you think even if it annoys people①.
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行文點評
本文為總分結(jié)構(gòu)，第一段提出觀點：睡姿顯示個性, 作者在首句提出Everyone has got two personalities，并指出在一個人熟睡時，睡姿會顯示出他真實的一面。進而作者在后面四段分別從四種不同的睡姿來闡釋人的個性，我們從中可以學(xué)到談?wù)撘粋€人性格時的幾種常見表達：open(心胸開闊)，secretive(遮遮掩掩)，nervous(易緊張)，balanced personality(性格平和)。
全文句型簡單，讀起來瑯瑯上口，十分適合于背誦。
好文妙譯
睡姿與性格
每個人都有雙重性格——一種是展示于外的性格，另一種是隱藏于內(nèi)的真實性格。在你醒著的時候，你不會表現(xiàn)你隱藏的個性，因為你能控制你的行為，但在熟睡時，你的睡姿會顯示你真實的一面。當然，通常人們在夜里會頻繁改變睡姿。最重要的姿勢是你入睡的姿勢。
如果你仰臥而睡，那么你是一個心胸開闊的人。一般你相信他人，易受流行時尚和新觀念的影響。你不喜歡使別人感到沮喪，所以你從不說出你真實的感受。你很害羞且不太自信。
如果你俯臥而睡，則你喜愛遮遮掩掩。你心事重重，且容易沮喪。你很固執(zhí)卻沒有野心。通常你為今天而不為明天而生活。這意味著你享受生活。
如果你蜷縮著身體而睡，則你很可能是個容易緊張的人。你的自我感覺不好，因此自我保護意識強。你很害羞，通常不喜歡與人交往。你傾向于依賴自己且容易受到傷害。
如果你側(cè)臥而睡，則你性格平和。你知道自己的優(yōu)點和缺點。一般而言，你小心謹慎且十分自信。有時你也會感到焦慮，但不會情緒低落。即使你的觀點會激怒別人，你也會將它表達出來。
詞匯斟酌
stubborn a.①頑固的，執(zhí)拗的，倔強的②難對付的，難于克服的
curl up ①卷起，撅起(嘴唇等)②(使)蜷起
defensive a.防御用的, 自衛(wèi)的
annoy vt.①使惱怒，使煩惱②打擾，干擾
佳句臨摹
?、佟窘馕觥縠ven if 即使;縱然;盡管
【臨目Even if I had to walk there all the way, I’ll get there.即使我得一路走著去，我也要走到那里。
思如泉涌
Only one’s mind is real. Strictly speaking, appearance is nothing but a mask. Real man is in himself.惟有人的心靈才是真實的。嚴格說來，相貌不過是一個面具。真相在人的內(nèi)心深處。
You may know by a handful the whole sack.由一斑可知全貌。
